If you must hurt me
Make it quick
A straight clean cut
You make me sick
A horrible person
Your such a player
Though I’ve been slayed
I’m now the slayer
You’ve made me stronger
Inside and out
I’m coming for you
Without half of a doubt
You tore me apart
And left me for dead
‘You’ll get over it”
Is what you said
Now that I stand here
Amongst your heartbreak
You’ll get over it
For goodness sake
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You did an amazing job encapsulating the anger and frustration one feels when they experience a breakup. A few lines that I really like are when you say "You tore me apart/And left me for dead/'You'll get over it'/Is what you said" - Beautiful construction.
One thing I question is the last three lines, which seem to switch perspective and say that the other person is feeling the heartbreak instead of you. Was that your intent for those lines?
I really enjoyed your writing style. I too have been through a horrible break up, and I want you to know you will heal and move on. All it takes is time!!!! And friends!!
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So this is not going to be much of a review, because....
I. LOVE. THIS. POEM!!! It speaks directly to the reader, and is soooo relatable! The writing is well done, you have definitely got talent.
I have to say, my favorite part is this:
"I’m coming for you
Without half of a doubt
You tore me apart
And left me for dead
‘You’ll get over it”
Is what you said
Now that I stand here
Amongst your heartbreak
You’ll get over it
For goodness sake"
It's awesome!