Breakup

by GabiSmithMyers

Published November 29, 2018

E - Everyone

In Broken

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If you must hurt me

Make it quick

A straight clean cut

You make me sick

A horrible person

Your such a player

Though I’ve been slayed

I’m now the slayer

You’ve made me stronger

Inside and out

I’m coming for you

Without half of a doubt

You tore me apart

And left me for dead

‘You’ll get over it”

Is what you said

Now that I stand here

Amongst your heartbreak

You’ll get over it

For goodness sake

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Samhain
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Samhain wrote a review Review · Nov 30, 2018

You did an amazing job encapsulating the anger and frustration one feels when they experience a breakup. A few lines that I really like are when you say "You tore me apart/And left me for dead/'You'll get over it'/Is what you said" - Beautiful construction.
One thing I question is the last three lines, which seem to switch perspective and say that the other person is feeling the heartbreak instead of you. Was that your intent for those lines?

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potatoefry2001
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potatoefry2001 commented Comment · Nov 30, 2018

I really enjoyed your writing style. I too have been through a horrible break up, and I want you to know you will heal and move on. All it takes is time!!!! And friends!!

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FireSpyGirl
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FireSpyGirl wrote a review Review · Nov 29, 2018

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here.
So this is not going to be much of a review, because....

I. LOVE. THIS. POEM!!! It speaks directly to the reader, and is soooo relatable! The writing is well done, you have definitely got talent.

I have to say, my favorite part is this:
"I’m coming for you

Without half of a doubt

You tore me apart

And left me for dead

‘You’ll get over it”

Is what you said

Now that I stand here

Amongst your heartbreak

You’ll get over it

For goodness sake"

It's awesome!



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