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Innocents are being killed
Children are dying
Hamas or Israel
The people of Britain are on the march
Palestine! They shout
Israel, the government cries back
What does it matter
Think the people of Gaza
They bomb us all the same
Hamas or Israel
Both are wrong
Both are murderers
The world cowers under American bombs
They support Israel
Watch as the streets turn red
And the bodies pile up
What a shame they say
But there is little we can do
Kill, kill, kill
More genocide
When will enough be enough
When will it stop
Don’t let the bitterness of the past
Dictate the future
Put your guns away
Put peace on the table
Give it a chance
The world can heal, but only without the war
Rebuilding is often forgotten
Once the fighting stops or a new war starts
The media move away
So does the help
Minefields stay
Homes don’t rebuild themselves
Lives don’t go back to normal
It’s always the same
People get hurt
Palestine or Israel
What does it matter
Both will lose
Nice work!
I like the contrast you draw between the various external, political perspectives on the war and the first hand, personal experience of the people caught up in it. I particularly liked the second stanza beginning "kill, kill, kill"; the repetition here very effectively emphasizes your anger and frustration at the inability of the warring parties to end the conflict and at all the people who are supporting one side or the other as if their 'team' were the good guys (almost like a sports match).
You have made good use of repetition throughout the poem, one instance being "Palestine/Hamas or Israel". The "or" stresses the division and opposition of the two and I like the way you resolve the poem by reminding the reader that regardless of which side secures a political victory, on an individual, human level there are no winners.
The more I read it the more I get the sense that the poem is directed at the bystanders of the conflict rather than Israel and Hamas themselves: to us who look on, participating in the events through the lens of the media while arguing about who we want to win.
Your voice and emotion came through quite clearly and consistently, which I didn't notice at first until I re-read the last two lines of the first stanza, which definitely have a voice of their own.
Keep up the good work!
This is such a neat piece! I love how the short sentences add a sense of urgency and longing.
Despite this being such a hard topic to write about, you did not favor one side over the other which is quite incredible. Rather, the objective fact that peace must be found is well stated. The repetition of "Palestine or Israel" "Hamas or Israel" also brings home the importance of the issue finding resolution. It's almost like a burning question in heavy need of answer. My favorite line might be the one about "kill, kill, kill" it makes one weary of the word as one is weary of the war. The lack of punctuation also adds a nice sense of urgency-so much that there is no time for punctuation. The word choice is also right on! The point that lives and homes cannot be rebuilt is also a deep thought, that even after the end of the war, pain will still exist, that war is never the answer to anything. I very much agree with these points.
Overall, fantastic job here. I dont really have any suggestions for improvement. 
-Kaia
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