Hey GSLeigh!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
Its been a long time since I have reviewed a short story, so I might be a little rusty. But the concept of your story intrigued me and I really wanted to give this a read.
I can't say that I was disappointed. Although, I will have to agree with the other reviewers - I did feel that it went too fast. What you have done here is described an emotion. The main content of the story was this person's relationship with the stage - how it makes her feel alive and breathes back life into her after this terrible phase that she has just gone through. I liked how you metaphorically presented the journey to the stage as her journey back to her true self.
However, it does leave a lot to the imagination. I feel there was a transition that we missed somewhere in between the pretty words and metaphorical representations. For example, we start at a difficult point in the narrator's life when her world has lost all color and meaning. We explore the bleakness of this world, when suddenly we are once again plunged back into colors and lights. While the transportation was presented well, it came without a cause. We do not know what had caused the narrator's life into black and while, but even that would have been alright if you had portrayed the transformation of her emotions, her outlook towards the world as well. Since you haven't done that here, there is this lack of emotional connection and the readers don't know enough to care about this character.
Overall, this was a really good abstract piece. It has great potential, and with a little more brush up and addition of information, it has the potential to become something even greater. I do feel that you have achieved at portraying the main thing here - the narrator's emotional connection with the stage and the satisfaction she feels while performing.
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
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