Published October 30, 2013
I have sisters
They do not look like me
They do not speak like me
Sometimes, our hurts are not the same
But sometimes they are.
I have sisters
Struggle binds my legs
Struggle clips their wings
Sometimes, we cannot change the pain around us
But sometimes we can
I have sisters
My skin is white and delicate
Their skin is black and fragile
Sometimes, we see each other by our race
But sometimes we don’t
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What I love the most about this poem is the fact that you took an slightly overused subject and made it your own. I can tell you put a lot of work into this, my favourite lines have to be
For me these lines are the most powerful in the poem. I also like the sister imagery. Mostly because I am a big sister myself. Happy writing.
I really enjoyed this poem. It's different to most, but really nice.
Im a person thats a bit eh when it comes to poetry, even though thats what I review the most, so I was amazed when I was really entertained.
Keep writing. It shall be amazing!!
ABSOLTELY, POSITIVELY JUST AMAZING!!!!! As your poem would refer to me as, black and fragile, I just loved how you were able to use both types of skin color in the same poem, but not sound racist. you have a really lovely piece, right here. it expresses their differences about their problems based on their skin color. you also said both skin colors were similar, delicate an fragile. That was a very nice touch.
- The Queen
Hi! Cheetah here to review your piece!
This was amazing. I absolutely loved it. The format you wrote in is very unique, but it definitely works.
The best lines for me are:
For some reason it really caught my attention. It seems so meaningful, I just love it.
The one thing I would change is the very end. It doesn't seem very satisfying. Maybe add a line such as, "These are my sisters" or "We see each other by something more".
That's about it. This poem was very, very well done. Keep writing!
Hello, here I am to write a review!
Okay, first I'd like to tell you that your poem was absolutely amazing and I love it! There were no flaws that I could see. The concept was beautiful. I love the beginning! I think this is it, but I'd still like to point out some suggestions, like I think it would help if you broke off the poem into paragraphs/stanzas, over all, that's it! Oh, wait! Is the lack of punctuation intentional? Because I think you should add some periods and commas. Okay, now I'm done.
I hope this review helped!
Keep writing!
GrapeNerd