Published April 26, 2011
Behold! The letters of Love.
They’re elegant like a swan
And pure like a dove.
Now note with me the letter L.
The loving memories;
The stories you will never tell.
The promise of tomorrow.
Til death do us part.
A life void of sorrow.
Peer at the letter O.
The ongoing time together.
When life shifts down to “Slow”.
Walking through the park,
And taking time to smell the roses.
Why yes, that is a memory to mark.
Take a gander at the letter V.
Oh, the vanity of love,
How gorgeous it can be.
Neither sunsets on the beach,
Nor flowers in the Spring
Come close to the beauty Love can reach.
Gaze at the final letter: E.
Each and every day
Being joyous and carefree.
To be as the birds are
Flying unchained without limits
That would be par.
Behold! The letters of Love.
Meant to keep your spirits high
When thinking of things thereof.
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Hi there. Lavvi in to review for you today.
This was cute. I've not yet read anything similar to this before. It wasn't really deep, which is fine, considering you only wrote about the first layer about love. It was a sweet read.
However, there's one or two things that you should take note of. You're using a lot of metaphors/similes, which is totally fine, but I'd like you to try some better ones. So far, they are ones that are commonly used: perhaps try and create your own, develop a little more originality for your poem and it'll be that much better.
Yours,
Lavvi
very cute. First i thought it was acctual letters as in the mail, but then i realized it's letters as in the alphabet! classic!!
Heyy!
I thought this was very creative! Well done. I love how you rhymed with the letters L. O. V. E. that added a very unique element to the poem! I did not find any edits and I thought the flow was really good. Also, you used good imagery, nicely done! Keep writing :]
-Jessa
Great poem! There are a lot of poems about love,but you still managed to make this one unique. I loved the concept of it and your word choice. I also thought that the "Behold!" at the beginning was a great way to catch the reader's attention. There weren't any corrections that I could find. Loved the poem
first of all,
i loved that stanza!i have to read it twice to get it like it should be and it worth it! *raise my hat*
Well done with your choice of stanzas. very good.
it completely match the flow of the emotion meant to be !
but this stanza , the last line is short and it weaken it a bit
just put it in mind...
over all i loved it!
one of my favorite so far! keep up and update us with more