Hey there! Plume here, with a review!
I'm not sure I've ever stumbled across a character profile in the Green Room before, but I'd figured I'd give a stab at reviewing it. I guess I'll start with some things I liked!
First of all, I think this story sounds super interesting. It definitely has the makings of a popular YA/middle grade book, what with all the soulmate magic what have you. Kendyll seems like a very compelling character. I like that you've included her interests, and I'm especially excited that you put down archaeology! As a history/anthropology enthusiast myself, I feel like that's not a widely used interest for main characters, and I was quite happy when I saw it. I also enjoy her last name in connection to witchcraft and magic; I'm not sure if "Nurse" was a reference to Rebecca Nurse, but I thought it was a cool touch regardless of whether it was intentional or not. I also think you worldbuilding seems really great judging by some of the stuff you've listed here; the magic cross country bit was cool, and the classes also sounded like real classes that I would expect a witch to take. The last bit of it was also telling of Kendyll's character, and in a more unconventional way, which I think worked nicely with the other stuff you had going on. Nice job!!
One thing I might include is a little synopsis/context for what project/story Kendyll is going to be in. I did some digging on your wall and found this, and I think something like that would work really well just to preface this. I'm not sure how accurate it is anymore though, since it is from a couple months ago, but still. Something like that could help people who see this maybe realize why some character choices make sense, etc.
One thing I also wondered about was the "favorites" section. I think that to some extent they're useful, but they're also not the most important thing about a character. Again, there's no harm in having them there, but I feel like you were also missing out on some key details of her character, like main motivations, goals, physical habits, etc. You also take the chance that you might end up putting too much unnecessary information about your character in the story. Unless it's necessary to the plot/it's super important to Kendyll's identity, I don't think the readers need to know her favorite animal or season. It's a creative work you're writing, not a get to know you back to school sheet, you know? I also noticed that some of the favorites were real-life things, like The Owl House, Cars 2, Chandelle LaVaun, etc. Including real works in your own book is fine, but you run the risk of dating/making your book more inaccessible to those who read it. For example I had no idea who Chandelle LaVaun was, but if your character mentioned it in the book or made a reference to it, I might be more prone to confusion/think lesser of your writing. Again, no harm in putting it on her profile if it's helpful to you; just some stuff to think about as you transfer this into the real story.
Overall: great job! Kendyll seems like a superb character, and I'm looking forward to reading the actual story, if you end up publishing it on YWS!! Until next time!!
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