Young Writers Society

Hey how you doing, FourLeafClover?

I can't express how precise this is. I've definitely have been in the same situation as well and it isn't an enjoyable situation to be in whatsoever. Overall I like this poem however, I still think that it could use more descriptive words for the painful injuries that you have sustained. Knee injuries are not good to ignore, they need time to heal. I dislike how coaches ignore major injuries. We are not professional athletes who can easily play with sprained ligaments and even minor injuries as well. You did a fantastic job! Keep writing and stay strong!

-BornToBeGreat

Hey, here with a quick review.

I love the clear message in bold, it gives an end effect which I very much enjoyed. I also loves the short and snappy sentences - they went straight to the point, so it doesn't bore the reader and makes them more engaged.

Obviously, I need to add critique for this to be a proper review. I think that you could have used more description to describe what pain and feelings you feel. It is only a request (just an idea) however I think that you are indeed extremely talented in the poetry side of writing.

Carry on, I would love to see your improvement and progress
Good luck & stay safe,

Love Rubes x

Hey there, hope you're having a wonderful day

Oh god this is so accurate, I never played hockey, but in soccer you'd literally get kicked in the face by a ball and the coaches would just be like "don't be such a wuss, it's just a scratch that's all" which is so infuriating.
But injuries aren't only physical, and I was kinda expecting you'd explore that side of it, since injuries can also be in our mind. Like the struggles of living everyday, or even the mental scars you get in sport. The pressure, the competition, the failures, the fear- all those things are just as important as physical scars.

I also loved the very short sentences and the bold words was a nice touch, it's almost as if they make up for an entirely new stanza. The last part of that "stanza" is too true.. "players need to heal", so true.

***stiggy <33

Hi! This is nightshadows bring a new comment live to a theater near you! Ok, so enough of my weirdness here are my thoughts:

Holy firkin cheese puffs yes. Ok so I used to play professional club soccer, and of course the players got thrown into the same hopeless situation. Like when somebody totally kicks you in the nose and it is bleeding everywhere, that classic line from the coach.
"Shake it off, don't be a wimp"

And it is true especially when you say,

Know that we need

To recover and to

Take time to heal.

I feel like this stanza could be about physical injuries, and also mental ones. Like the struggles during life you need time to recover and heal from the tragedies of the past. Haha and also I saw the title, injuries, and I was intrigued because at the moment I have a sprained left wrist which is probably making my typing a whole lot slower but overall the situation isn't too bad lol. Great poem!! Totally reminds me of my childhood

I thought I separated the stanzas, but now they're just all clumped together. Weird.