Who can I trust?
I can't say I know who to trust ,
when everyone I know secretly looks at me with disgust.
Their words sting like an africanized bee,
with their venom seeping inside of me.
I can feel myself growing weaker day by day,
the world around me turning grey.
No, I can't win this fight.
Not when everything is coming out of sight.
Goals, intentions and dreams . . .
Maybe they just weren't meant for me.
I lie down closing my eyes,
thinking of all the problems I know will arise.
I awake to the reality of my life,
Every word killing me like a knife.
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awesome poem. If this is something that happened to you or is happening to you, one thing no one should never forget is that it shouldn't matter what people say. (even if it goes on for days, weeks, months, years) you shouldn't let them get to you because all that they are trying to do is getting a reaction. in my opinion people who do this, are doing it because they have a problem/situation of there own they don't know how to cope with it so they bash on others.
I hope this helps. looking forward to reading more things
Thank you. This really means a lot
you are very welcome.
I like how you kept the rhyming and structure of your lines consistent. I would of liked if you used more personal detail. Also, you don't have to put a comma/ dots at the end of each line if you don't want to. But overall I thought this poem was good
Thank you for the tips c: I'll use them when I write my next poem!
Hey there! Excellent job on the poem!
I can't wait to read more of your works soon!
Hi ! Thank you so much. I'll be sure to write more