Young Writers Society

Wow! This is really interesting. Your wording is very well done. You make the reading feel only the poem, nothing else in the moment they are reading. This is easy to follow, and fun to read.

Only one little critique:
Its a little vague, but I think that is your point. Let the reader interpret what they thing the meaning is, and not just to say it straight out.

I also live this part, not just because of the way its written, but how correct you are.
"Stomping on ants

Mother scolded me for my ego

Believing I could rule over a race that had more wits

In their little antennas than I had"

The human race is very capable of believing that because of the technology and advancements they have made, that they are the superior species. Not in any way, shape, or form is this true. I love how you stated that there. Simply Beautiful!

Like the other reviewer said, Im not quite sure of the meaning, but have an Idea of it, and I think that id why I love this poem so much.

Keep on Writing! You have a talent for such beautiful works of art called poetry!

-abachmann

hiya! I'm just passing by with a review!

this is an incredibly interesting poem that you've created here. I've never seen or read anything quite like it and I adore it! There's a masterful use of imagery to describe what you've imagined in writing this poem. I love the continuous and unorthodox format here where many lines were seemingly written to emphasize what the preceding lines were trying to say.

I am a little unclear on the entire message though I'm fairly sure that I have a general idea of it but other then that, I don't have many other comments or critiques. This is a really well written poem! Well done! I hope to see more of your works in the future!

~Mack

hiya! I'm just passing by with a review!

this is an incredibly interesting poem that you've created here. I've never seen or read anything quite like it and I adore it! There's a masterful use of imagery to describe what you've imagined in writing this poem. I love the continuous and unorthodox format here where many lines were seemingly written to emphasize what the preceding lines were trying to say.

I am a little unclear on the entire message though I'm fairly sure that I have a general idea of it but other then that, I don't have many other comments or critiques. This is a really well written poem! Well done! I hope to see more of your works in the future!

~Mack

hiya! I'm just passing by with a review!

this is an incredibly interesting poem that you've created here. I've never seen or read anything quite like it and I adore it! There's a masterful use of imagery to describe what you've imagined in writing this poem. I love the continuous and unorthodox format here where many lines were seemingly written to emphasize what the preceding lines were trying to say.

I am a little unclear on the entire message though I'm fairly sure that I have a general idea of it but other then that, I don't have many other comments or critiques. This is a really well written poem! Well done! I hope to see more of your works in the future!

~Mack