Hi Flite! Niteowl here to review for Team Stitch this fine review day!
Okay, I apologize, but a lot of this is going to be nit-picky. I like the overall idea, and how you managed to make an interesting story out of all the names. I did this challenge, but I mostly just described various shades of blue and didn't link them together that well.
On to the review:
In the first line, the first thing that jumps out at me is the tense-switching. It looks like most of the poem is in past tense, so I would keep it consistent. I also think "cheery-wood" should be "cherry-wood" unless I'm missing something here.
Leaves shaped in your favourite organ, pumped with autumn’s blood
That were also the colour of your hair
I love the imagery in the first line, but I think the second line is a little awkward. I think it would work if you replaced "were" with a stronger verb, like "that matched...".
But you said that aspens will fall at winter’s footstep
This might be a personal-preference thing, but I think "will" is unnecessary and "aspens fall at..." flows better.
where grave marble angels carve their holy scriptures
Like this image, but I think you could cut some of the adjectives. Maybe "where grave angels carved their scriptures", for example. I'd also keep this in past tense.
"upturn" should be "upturned".
I really like the ending. Though I think you're cheating a bit here...hemlock and wolfsbane aren't trees. Though apparently there's a pine tree genus called hemlocks, but I assume you're referencing the poisonous one?
Overall, I really like this, just a few small suggestions. Great job and keep writing!
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