Could you expand on that? I'm a little confused. Apart from that, it wasn't quite the reaction I was expecting, but a compliment nonetheless.To be honest, I was disappointed the way the hero was not even seen properly before we know he is dead.
I thought I had written enough so the reader was able to distinguish Samual's charactor and get a feel for his priorities. What exactly is the story lacking itself?
Heh, well on the very first draft, which was short there really wasn't much action, the charactors were vague; without life. On this draft, yes, there definately is alot more action, alot more discriptions and dialog.Just a suggestion, but I thought someone would have moved it by now to Action/Adventure.
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