Hey there! This has been in the green room for awhile, so I decided to check it out! c: A quick note; I have read the Outsiders before, but it's been a looong time xD so if I say anything stupid, please feel free to ignore it :p
I think this a nice poem that gives sort of a quick summary of the plot and an introduction to some of the main characters! And your rhyme scheme does give a nice rhythm and bounce to the poem overall. I also noticed you are consistent in capitalization, which I think is important, and it makes your poem look clean and organized. I would also like to point out one spot I enjoyed in particular:
Losing his parents left a hole for him to fill
He was responsible for paying the bill
But no price was too big to stay with his loved ones
All their love for each other amounted to great sums
I think this a lovely ending to your poem. You've shown that despite all the hardships you are facing, nothing can beat love, and I think that's a gorgeous message to send. So overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem of yours! ^_^ I do have a few suggestions for you. These are just suggestions though, so if you don't agree with them, please feel free to disregard them!
The firs thing I'd like to mention is your line length. It kind of jumps around, and like Maryah said, it can make your poem choppy in some places. Because most of your lines are medium to the longer side, the very short lines come as a surprise, and it interrupts the flow a bit. My suggestion would be to add to those shorter lines; add adjectives to your nouns, throw in some similes and metaphors, and just make those lines more descriptive overall! This won't only help with line length, but this will also help with making your poem more descriptive and tangible for the reader!
The next thing I'd like to mention is stanzas. Your poem is on the longer side, so adding stanzas will help make this easier to read and less intimidating. There are many ways you can break up this poem, and I'll give you one suggestion in the spoiler below! But if you want to keep it as it is, that's perfectly fine also!
Spoiler! :
The next thing I'd like to mention is punctuation. I noticed you don't utilize that much punctuation, and I'm mostly talking about at the end of lines. Punctuation is a stylistic choice, so if you don't want any punctuation, that's perfectly fine! But I do think it would be helpful to add commas at the end of lines to help the flow, or at least a period at the very end of this poem to suggest finality and give a complete resolution to this poem. But again, it's your choice! c:
One last thing I'd like to mention is your beginning
Never got to live a full life
Only got one filled with misery and strife
Looking after his kid brothers
Sometimes they seemed more like bothers
Especially if you haven't read the book, it's a bit unclear who you're talking about in the beginning. Who didn't get to live a full life? What kid brothers are you talking about? Since the reader can't establish a definite speaker, it's hard for the reader to understand and connect with the poem, or at least that's how it was for me. Personally, I would try to establish a speaker right at the beginning so your reader will be able to follow along with the poem, even if they haven't read the book.
And that's it! Overall, I enjoyed reading this; it reminded me of The Outsiders and makes me want to read it again cx I love your use of rhyme scheme, and the story and message embedded in your poem is nicely conveyed. I hope to read more of your work soon, and I hope this helped!
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