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Lovely Brothers

by FireEyes


Never got to live a full life

Only got one filled with misery and strife

Looking after his kid brothers

Sometimes they seemed more like bothers

But love was at the center of all he did

But Pony didn’t understand like a little kid

That punch was out of grief

Then out of the blue, he was running from the chief

Stressful days and sleepless nights

Looking at all Of Pony’s favorite sights

Still trying to find him

A boy’s home is where he’d end up in

Begging Two-Bit and Steve

To tell where Pony would have to leave

He went up to, the tough as nails, Dally

Didn’t tell them but they went to a valley

Cried of anguish, sadness, and anger

Stayed for a week and in the air, they lingered

“What would mom and dad think?”

Then a thought crept in and made his heart sink

What if they were dead like Bob?

He couldn’t but he wanted to sob

He had to find Ponyboy

When he did nothing could fill him with more joy

The first time he cried

He made up for the love his parents supplied

He tried hard to suppress it

And his legs made him want to sit

Pony ran over and figured it out

He loved Pony but didn’t make a sound

The message had been sent

And Pony silently gave his repent

In his brother’s embrace

He looked at Pony’s tear-stained face

He looked at Soda’s smile

And the world at that moment didn’t so seem vile

Suppressing sobs

His and Soda’s jobs

All to support Pony

He used to think he was a phony

In front of his brothers, bound in love

He felt a huge weight being lifted off from someone above

Losing his parents left a hole for him to fill

He was responsible for paying the bill

But no price was too big to stay with his loved ones

All their love for each other amounted to great sums


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Sun Nov 22, 2020 1:13 am
NastyMajesty wrote a review...



Hello @FireEyes! @NastyMajesty poppin' in here for a quick review. Nice to mee-- wait. I know you in real life and I'm just doing this as an example review for you. I'm being nit-picky on purpose because I can't find anything hugely wrong with this. Nevermind. Kay let's just jump right in.

Grows
Okay, so first off...

Looking at all Of Pony’s favorite sights
You don't need "of" capitalized in this sentence. Also, secondly, this stanza was a bit choppy:
Suppressing sobs

His and Soda’s jobs

All to support Pony

He used to think he was a phony
Anyways, that's all the huge nitpicks I can come up with.

Glows
He had to find Ponyboy

When he did nothing could fill him with more joy

The first time he cried

He made up for the love his parents supplied
I really like this stanza. It describes his love for his brothers so well. You do a great job depicting how Darry feels and his emotions throughout the entire poem. Overall, amazing job! Keep writing!
:D





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