Go on! Say your goodbyes!
They are filled with promises and lies.
I can feel your wrath,
It takes just one breath.
I don't care what you say,
I mind my own way,
Through the park - so old
With the sky - so cold.
I`m tired of your eyes.
Everytime they watch my cries.
I gave you trust,
But you gave me stardust.
You dragged me through hell on my knees,
I yelled and cried "Please!"
But no...
I beg of you! Just go.
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My first poem 
i like it. for a very first poem, this is great. i very much like that it has a rhyme scheme, but at the same time, it's not a solid repetitive rhyme scheme, like shakespeare's iambic pentameter. (not that there is anything wrong with iambic pentameter. in fact i quite enjoy it myself). But yes, very very good first poem.
I love your imagination, word choice, passion, and feeling. You are, truly, a great writer.
If you are looking to edit or just to improve your next poem, try working on your rhythm - it didn't quite fit right, and that's distracting and irritating to a reader.
Great work -- you're amazing!! 
-KK
Did you know? This doesn't rhyme like a poem. This is more like a rock song.
Good work.
Go on! Say your goodbyes!
I can feel your wrath,
It takes [s]just[/s] one breath.
I mind my own way,
I`m tired of your eyes.
Everytime they watch my cries.
But you gave me stardust.
But no...
I beg of you! Just go.
Ahh. So you started poems now 
Great. Great work (as always.)
Dramatic. Well written, all in all.
Continue the greát work.
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LORD ANZIUS WUZ HERE 
Nice poem. I'm not much of a poetry writer myself, but we had to do a lot of it in school once.
Go on! Say you goodbyes!
I can fell your wrath
They, everytime, watch my cries.
You dragged me through hell in my knees,
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