https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/e/2PACX-1vS...
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This link will bring you to a Google slide, which is what I used to make this text based adventure game, which I personally count as writing. Make sure to read the directions. the slides will auto advance every 1 minute bc I couldn't figure out how to turn it off.
(Side note: This isn't really meant to be a choose your own adventure game where there are wildly different storylines. This is more of a focused storyline in this specific format.)
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This is soooo cool! Had no idea you could link to different slides in google slides
Ok I accidentally clicked on this and idk how that happened but i guess i can review it while I'm here =D
It just looks like you could check up how to do dialogue formatting correctly (you were inconsistent in that) Punctuation within Dialogue
Love the font :3
Hmmm I wonder why the teacher is not allowed to teach anymore after looking directly at you. Is that a hint that we are stuck in a time loop? Are there hidden things to click to escape? (Only one way to find out)
Also why do parents get to decide what books the children read???! The US is so weird.
Grammar tip: Remember that "English" and other languages are capitalised as adjectives :3
Hmmm now we are loosing the English teacher as well.... Suspish
Oh I chose to throw away the letter and now I am stuck in the dark (tho i think the information that the form is the google slide (I think?) is a little hazily presented and could be made clearer)
Oh is the creature a copy of "you" and now doing your routine (aka doing homework?)
Also dialogue formatting: "Those are my memories," it says
See that I didnt capitalise it? That's because "it says" is not a complete sentence and therefore the dialogue is actually part of the sentence. Also was not capitalising "those" a deliberate choice?
I like that you specifically say that the bedroom is blue to hint at the fav color
Hm i kinda got the good ending slide but the game continues? =D
I guess this is leftover info if you choose to read the letter?
*goes back to the slide with the letter and tries to read it* Ohh you cheeky game!!
*goes even further back to the first time you can read the letter* Ah there we go, this seems like progress.
Ah okay now we are where the good ending slide leads to.
Ah so only not reading the letter and talking the creature down leads to the good ending.
Cute story
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