Eek! Um! First! The window pane is the glass that makes the window. Usually windows are in sections, so one of those sections is the pane. o_o So I don't see how if the rain touched the glass it would trickle to reach the pane. That's something that has to be fixed. D: Ah~
I like, to a point, this quiet image. I don't know that it fits that he's singing? As he's playing the guitar? Like, the use of singing through his amp actually draws out images of him sitting there singing into a microphone, not through the guitar. I think it's a difficult jump to make because a guitar is music related and so is singing, so we take singing literally unless! it's applied to the object and not the person.
The guitar is singing. We could get behind that.
Um. So~ Maybe you could also consider that people always always always associate rain with sadness? Or not always, but it's one of the easy jumps people make, and very common, so to pair the two in your poem verges on cliche. D: I think the movement of the rain would pair better with the movement of his fingers, both in that trickling sort of way, if you really wanted to write about this kid.
And lastly, I don't know if this is constructive, but due to the word that you chose (pick) and unfortunate other closely-spelled words and the boy sitting alone on his bed and the importance of fingers, it kind of comes out sounding dirty in the first stanza, like it's all a different sort of metaphor. eep!
PM me if you have any questions or comments, please.
Good luck and keep writing!
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