Published December 29, 2007
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Wow!
You got me there!
The story has been ambushed by pirates! Oh noes!
Oh right, phew. For a moment there I thought that there was some fancy way of getting to the stories that was the norm on this site and unable to find it I was simply going to crash and burn...
Maybe they just forgot? It does happen...
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Where is the writing?
Ok, why do I see nothing but an emoticon?
So, I wasn't sure if I was just dense, and missed some cleverly hidden link to some amazingly written story - one wich had to be hidden through a link, or it may blind us all through brilliance - but there isn't one.
I thought for a moment that your cleverly placed and bracketed "Ambushed" was a clever trigger to indicate the the chapter had been ambushed and therefore could not possibly appear... but it does not seem as such.
When you get around to actually posting something *readable* PM me, I'd like to see it. Until then, delete this, or put something there.
*Hearts* Le Penguin.
wow, i'm new to YWS but this is a really humorous peice. honestly.
The main character was well-drawn, and his emotions were conveyed vividly, but the plot was virtually non-existent.
Seriously, where is the writing? Let me know when there is something here to critique and I'll certainly come back.