Hello. You're new here, I see. Welcome.
On to your poem:
This was really cute. Although I must say it was rather cliche because it was kind of just a poetry form of a standard template highschool romance. It isn't exactly a bad thing because the delivery is different and original but the concept was quite cliche.
This poem rhymed but the rhythm was rather off in some areas. Like in that I hate You became my phrase line. Fix up the rhythm a little, read this out loud to yourself and if it doesn't flow too well add or deduct a few syllables.
Anyway, generally a good poem but I believe it could get even better.
Keep writing.
-Nixie
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