Marriage lasts for not just through life.
A love that was passionate and fiery like a
Red flame that can't be quenched.
An amazing journey we went through
Just how lucky can I get with you gone.
Admiring your Jade green eyes only in memory.
Death is only a change of worlds.
Every man has his gem and Mara was mine. Her memory shall live on like an eternal flame. I will always call her name but I will stay for her sake.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,018 Literary Works • 672,861 Reviews
Hey Lanna!
Ok!
I really, really liked it!
This one made me cry (again).
You captured Mara very well. I especially like what you did with 'gem'. Since her name was Jade..and jade IS a gem..well yeah!
It's great!
~Timea
Thanks and her eye color is jade green so I'm describing her eye color.
Lanna
Ah... A very nice read. I don't know about poetry though.
Anyways
I don't know if I'm right or not, maybe you meant your instead of you?
Because her name is Jade, I'm just not sure, this sentence just needs a little altering I think, if you didn't mean her Jade eyes.
like a eternal --- an
I love reading your Star Wars poems! (just haven't done crits on the others yet, sorry)