Young Writers Society

Wow, first of all I give all my prayers to your well-being and I do hope that you are doing well. Your poem really shows a sense of voice which makes it so much stronger and more impactful amongst audiences, especially with emotive words and phrases such as "he is gone". It was really brave of you to share your experiences, huge respect.

Furthermore, by using certain repetition such as "he" and "I" really emphasizes the idea about how much he meant to you, towards the audience. This way, they are able to position themselves with the author's context or point of view which engages them to keep reading.

Fabulous job! Well done! Amazing!

Such a catastrophe and a purging of ones emotion as a result of abandonment. Its a nice one and o give you a kudos🤚for it. At certain times, we in oneway or the other, we seem to lose those whom we love to the cold hands of death and other unfathomable uncertainties.
I think the poem was a bit of contradictory though with a little air of suspense, especially at the beginning of the poem.
At first, I thought the speaker was referring to God but as the line protruded, I Realized she meant her now dead Iover. However, one thing I should point out to you is that
"He is why I smile
He is why I haven't given up
He is the reason for everything
He is the reason why I'm in this mess" contradicted itself especially the fourth lines. It doesn't just fit the first three lines but anyways its a nice one.

Such a catastrophe and a purging of ones emotion as a result of abandonment. Its a nice one and o give you a kudos🤚for it. At certain times, we in oneway or the other, we seem to lose those whom we love to the cold hands of death and other unfathomable uncertainties.
I think the poem was a bit of contradictory though with a little air of suspense, especially at the beginning of the poem.
At first, I thought the speaker was referring to God but as the line protruded, I Realized she meant her now dead Iover. However, one thing I should point out to you is that
"He is why I smile
He is why I haven't given up
He is the reason for everything
He is the reason why I'm in this mess" contradicted itself especially the fourth lines. It doesn't just fit the first three lines but anyways its a nice one.

'Ello there!

So this feels like the aftermath of a bad break up, and if it is based off of a real moment, don't hesitate to message me if you want. I might point out some things that could bother you if this is early on afterwards, so please just don't read them until you're ready to.

Moving on to the review ~

He is why I smile on Mondays

He is why I haven't given up

He is why I break down

He is how I fell in love

I just hope he knew he was my everything

He is now neglected

first i would say about this poem is you did your best on this love poem i love it. second i would say is i don't like how you said he is why break down i just don't like that half. third i would say is i love this love poem so much through.


but i love your poem so much i would support it for you its cute.

good job brokenheartsari