Ummmmmmmmmm...I believe about half of the 2007 collegiate dictionary is stuffed into that piece of work. Just kidding, just kidding. No, I am not the Simon Cowell of poetry critique. =] Constructive...but not vicious.
I liked how the poem flowed and seemed to have an audible beat. Your imagery was brilliant and the concept was great.
There were too many complex words and I think that if you kept some and replaced others, it would be a professional-sounding, imaginative poem.
Keep up the good work.
Points: 890
Reviews: 29
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