Published December 14, 2010
She dances like an angel:
So beautiful, and graceful;
Arms outstreched towards the skies,
Shimmering hair and deep, dark eyes.
White cloths draped on her shoulders,
Light booties on her feet.
Cheeks are blushing rosily
in the cozy heat.
A smile is painted luciously
on deep-filled blood-red lips,
While an audience claps, eagerly;
believing what they see.
Her eyes can tell her story,
But nobody can see;
For who would look that closely
at perfect, tainted beauty...?
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I really liked this, i read the first line and wanted to read so much more, seriously good and keep it up
I really enjoyed this poem, however the rhyme scheme needs some work. Seems as if you just threw in words that rhyme here and there. It makes for a bumpy rhythm. Your punctuation was a little off in places also. I really liked it though. Its almost there, just work a little more.
I knew it. You write beautifully. This seems so perfect for the holiday season especially.
I was looking for a nitpick but I honestly could not find one. So this will be a rather unconstructive review. Oh well.
This is really good emma. its really insightful ! keep it up xx
WOW! wicked the first one of your happy poems lol it's really good i love the but where you put here eys tell a story, it's dead good loving it ssoooooooo much keep it up emma. you could probabily tell a bit of the story behind her eyes or would that ruin it your choice really!!!! xxxx