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I thought my two years of high school Spanish could get me through the Spanish part.
Yeah, it didn't. I knew about thirteen words, if you count and, the, and a. But the meaning of the poem is still quite beautiful; it's pretty short, but it still has beautiful imagery to it. REALLY beautiful imagery.
I don't quite understand how touching something could help you learn to see something, but maybe that's because I'm as deep as a pond sometimes. Besides that, there's really not much to critique, besides the length. I do love short poems, but I feel like this one needs a bit more; it doesn't feel fully complete. That might just be me in my pond-level deepness though.
Sorry if this review wasn't really helpful. Really beautiful poem though; keep writing.
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-Tgirly
Oh, heh. I re-read that just now and realize that well, this isn't actually all that great. I should expand it though, I really should... you should read my "Mi sol" poem instead, I felt that it was better.
Thanks!
It's beautiful to the ear, but that's it. There's not much going on in the poem. There's little no action, it's a snippet: a beautiful snippet, but nothing more than that. Trust me, I love it when I see my mother tongue posted: however, there's not much going on here.
The poem could definitely use some more elaboration. I know there's a story in here, somewhere. I may even use it as inspiration to write something -it's just that gorgeous: however, I wish you wrote more.
Porque me tienes aqui pidiendo para mas, ah?
I look forwards to seeing more, sorry I couldn't say much. I'm already out of my comfort zone by commenting on poetry, but when I saw it was in Spanish and those few lines really did touch me. I knew I had to say something! It's a shame no one else has before me. Honest. I hope to see this again.