Published December 19, 2009
3. Flying [Over the Atlantic]
It felt amazing. Flying without a parachute. Free-diving. Spiralling. Losing my senses. Free as a bird, soaring on the wind.
Yeah I jumped. Yeah it was the dumbest thing I’ve done in my life. But it was also the best.
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Chapter 4 and 5 are up aswell
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LOL, great few sentences...But...what happens next?! LOL
Tanya
There should be commas after both "yeah's".
And the I've should normally be "I have", but since this piece is already so informal with all the "yeah's", I guess it's all right.
Yeee.