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3. Flying [Over the Atlantic]

by Ella_Mercy


3. Flying [Over the Atlantic]

It felt amazing. Flying without a parachute. Free-diving. Spiralling. Losing my senses. Free as a bird, soaring on the wind.

Yeah I jumped. Yeah it was the dumbest thing I’ve done in my life. But it was also the best.

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Mon Dec 21, 2009 10:11 pm
Ella_Mercy says...



:) thanks

Chapter 4 and 5 are up aswell :)

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Mon Dec 21, 2009 2:20 pm
borntobeawriter says...



LOL, great few sentences...But...what happens next?! LOL

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Sat Dec 19, 2009 10:35 pm
Lena.Wooldridge says...



There should be commas after both "yeah's".

And the I've should normally be "I have", but since this piece is already so informal with all the "yeah's", I guess it's all right.

Yeee.





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