Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this was quite a funny story. At first glance it seems like its meant to be a little bit of an actually serious case of this possible murder but then it just descends into a whole lot of joking around and there's a very prevalent undercurrent of humor in there which is a nice little touch.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I should have known it was Daffy Duck all along.
Okay not the most exciting opening in the history of books but it'll do.
By the little twitch in that scoundrel's eye, the way his feathers shivered each and every time he answered a question, the way he ate a jelly doughnut, I knew it was him all along.
"Daffy, where's the body?" I slammed my fist against the cold table, sending a chill up my spine. My eyes were hooked on that duck.
Okay this appears to be some kind of interrogation. I think it would help matters if there was some description here to tell us where this man is and where this duck is so that the setting of this is a little clearer.
His eyes quivered. He licked his lips a few times, applied some beak-chap stick and continued to shake. His nervousness soon had him bounding off the walls, screaming," OOO WOOO OOO WOOO OOO WEEEE OOO!!!"
Okay that's a lot of caps lock there. YOU might want to town that down a bit and say that he shouted that over and over again.
After a while though, he got quiet, really quiet. Uncomfortably quiet. The quiet you get after the still of the night when you're busy roasting marshmallows on an open fire and your buddy Josh let's out a big one and you can't help but pause because it sounded like a rouge bulldozer. That's that silence.
This paragraph cracked me up far too much. *falls of chair*
"You're dis-sch-picable! ... It was always about Bugschs Bunny, wasn't it? The way he cheered up folks. How they love him... how they LOVED him," Daffy Duck let out a cackle. It was the most "MUWA-HA-HA"ing cackle I had ever heard... from a duck.
Well I can definitely see this one was made with an undercurrent of humor being prevelant.
Daffy was under arrest for the murder of Bugs Bunny.
And the eating of my jelly doughnut.
I should have known it was Daffy Duck all along...
Well that's a lovely little ending that you have on there. Also "jelly doughnut". *collapses onto the floor again*.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: So this was quite a bit of fun to read. Definitely puts a smile on your face which is the first time I've said that about a story involving a murder. The flow is great, the language used is just perfect for what this story is trying to do and its just a really fun little story to read. Great job there!
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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