Hey Elinor!! Silver here to review for you!!
First of all I just wanted to say that I don't know much about script writing and how much detail you include or don't, so I'm just going to review this the best that I can and hope that it helps. 
Main Points
It comfortable, relaxing restaurant, but a cheap one.
"It" should be "It's". Also I feel that the word "but" here reads a little funny. Maybe use "and" instead? Seeing as it's a comfortable and relaxing restaurant it should be fine.
At a booth towards the back of the restaurant
"In" I think would sound better than "At".
Okay, so this was interesting to read. I like how you explored the idea of being famous. How someone can want it so much but then sort of not want it so much once they have it. In particular I really liked:
And no one's ever going to know who they are. Why, in the eyes of the public, am I better?
That's so true. Why? Why is it that some people with amazing voices become great singers but others don't? Why is it that people who can't really sing become mega popstars? One of the best things about your piece was that it really got me thinking.
Now, your script is a little threadbare as you mentioned in you A/N. I don't think it's too bad, because due to the lack of detail the reader is prompted to focus more on the content and dialogue and it's meaning. That being said it does kind of have a silent feel about it. Maybe include a little detail about whether the restaurant was noisy? Or quiet? Could we have a little more on what they look like? Or at least a little more on their facial expressions? Is there a reason that you didn't really too much detail to this? If anything, I think facial expressions or body language would be a nice addition to help develop your characters a little more.
Overall, I I enjoyed this! I loved the thoughtfulness of it and the interaction between the two characters. I hope I've helped!! Happy writing!!
Silverlock
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