This is another gem that I wait for from you. I love the fact that you've practically threw away the rulebook that the rest of us seem to follow and go with your own rules. Oh- and FYI, I really enjoyed your piece on YWS radio. It cleared a heck of a lot of things up for me, even when the odd moment here and there with a big silence followed by 'I think Nate died.' So funny. But I digress.
A few things leaped straight out at me like hot coals. Short of sentences that made me really think and try to work out what you were saying-
For example:
tonight my colon
will detonate,
I'm not really sure what this means. It's raw imagery in any case.
I think you've really got the theme of the disillusioned culture of the twenty first century. Everything is overly complicated yet simple, and you really brought the message home. It's a great poem. The last line was fantastic for me:
New York City is the only place
we can keep the Christians off the streets.
Great job,
Eimear
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