First we learned the importance
of a statement, sentence, thesis, quote,
the authors use of stanzas and paragraphs.
And in between batches of pancakes
we discussed the world around us
in context with the one we held between
two thick pieces of paper.
We acted out plays the way
shakespeare never intended
with corny accents, but we got the gist.
Even with the soliloquies and one liners,
there was war, romance, rivalry,
comedic relief, breaking us through the confusion.
And when we sat around the table,
sharing a meal, a tofu turkey, a pie,
when we hung lights from a fake tree,
we became a little family.
What was the point of it all?
Did we ever get closer to Z?
The only thing that’s for sure
is that we have art,
and literature,
poetry, and paintings,
hundreds of inspired souls,
carrying forth everything they learned,
using memories to light the way.
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Lives4Christ24 is here for yet another review. Salutations,EEK5. I really like your poem and I'm sorry your teacher passed on. I really like the emotion in this poem, I can see how much you cared about and admired this teacher. While there are a few grammatical errors in this poem, you know what your saying and get the message your trying to get across.Thanks for contributing to the USA community.
Hello EKK15, just going to dive in here, these are just my nits and suggestions. Feel welcome to take what you like and leave what you don't.
"the authors use of stanzas and paragraphs" - should be 'author's'
I love the line "And in between batches of pancakes we discussed the world around us"
Just one suggestion, instead of "in context with the one we held between two thick pieces of paper" change it to "in contrast with"
Shakespeare should be capitalized.
I think if you take out the commas towards the end of the poem, it would flow better. I'm just imagining this being spoken and the last few lines read as if they should flow one right into the other rather than having pauses in between.
This is a great poem, one that I appreciate as a writer and lover of lit and the arts. Thank you for sharing!
-Dream
This is really beautiful!