Hi Ekk15 - lovely reflection on graduation, some of the stanzas and thoughts read as quite chopped apart where there doesn't seem to be continuous meaning going through each sentence or phrase. I'd suggest trying to read each sentence separately and see if it makes sense at that level.
For instance, these lines: " to be
the shades of pink in the evening
that soothes my best friend as we walk" don't quite make sense to me. Like there's some words missing.
I did like that you captured specific moments though! This made your poem feel more concrete.
While I wouldn't normally comment on capitalization, I'd suggest in a poem that starts out as being about "getting good grades" that it seems like a good one to use capital letters in, since the lower cased letters don't really add much, though the capital ones might make the individual sentences divide a bit more clearly.
The colors at the end were an interesting point of continuity, though the colors were a bit random, so I'm not sure if there was extra symbolism there that I missed or if they were really just random colors that went with the earlier points of the poem.
Overall, I took the meaning of the poem to be that the speaker is feeling nostalgic about their younger years as they approach graduation and are trying to assign meaning to their different memories.
Best of luck in editing! You've chosen a subject that many people can certainly relate to.
~alliyah
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