A million miles away

hey there
this is a very good poem , full of positivity and supporting , i think that the whole idea of it is interesting and catchy ,the title was very expressive and true.
i'll start by a question WHERE IS THE PUNCTUATION ?, i mean most of people have problems with punctuation (i'm one of them) but NO punctuation is wrong, it's so important thing in poetry , so make sure you punctuate it. another thing is that imagery , as iggy said it's quite important thing in poetry , i always make sure to mention it in my reviews , it add a richness to the poem and make it attractive .
so in the end i have to say that you're GOOD at poetry so keep writing , can't wait to read more of your works
smile

Hey Dreamer Shauzer here reviewing
I liked this poem, it fits with your name - sounds like a dream. There are a few problems though. I didn't like the way you only used capital letters twice. If you're going to use them, use them throughout. I think commas would've been helpful - but keeping in mind I'm not a poet, don't take my critique too seriously.

Walk your path
With one step past to
the point of no delay

I didn't understand this part. With one step past to the point of no delay... Still mulling it over, maybe it's the way it's worded, i don't know. It just doesn't sound right and puts a damper in the flow. I liked the font type, it added to the mysteriousness of the poem, and the uniqueness. One thing I don't get, why are you telling the person to go away a million miles, but at the same time asking them to stay? Is this intentional, like you are undecided of your emotions towards this person? Or is it a mistake? Either way, it just bugs me a little bit. Make sure to read over your work a bit before you publish

On the brighter side, this was excellent for a guy who doesn't do poetry. It was mysterious, dream-like, as I said above. The font suited it perfectly and it was a pleasure to read. Keep that flow constant, you did a good job of that here. And i think you should write more poetry, because in this there was definitely some good potential.

Keep writing.
Yours in ink,
TS.

And a nice attempt this was. Not bad at all.

I suggest two things: punctuation and stanza breaks. I know poetry defies all laws of grammar, but by the way your sentences are formed, I suggest you add punctuation in. It could just be me and my odd ways of poetry, but the punctuation might strengthen your lines and help the flow, since the breaks are evident, but the lack of punctuation doesn't show the breaks and so the flow is weird. To me, anyways.

I also suggest stanza breaks because isn't it obvious why? Stanzas help the pacing of the poem, give the reader a break to breathe and absorb what they've read, and just helps make the poem look pretty. Plus, you have spots in there where you can break off. So it's up to you, but I suggest stanzas. I like stanzas.

Overall, this was a nice poem, but it lacks imagery. Imagery is, after all, one of the strongest factors when it comes to poetry. Isn't there more you can tell us about the miles? I know it's a figurative example to describe the hardships the narrator is facing, but can you give us a bit more about them? Maybe why s/he's going through what s/he is, or what these hardships are?

Other than that, this was nicely done for a rookie poet! (don't worry, I'm one too) Your rhythm scheme, for the most part, was clear and cute and flowed easily due to the simple words. I enjoyed reading it and I think it's better than you think it is.

I messed up on the spoiler...sorry about that