Words Behind "I Miss You"

by DragonLADY

  • Poetry

Published December 20, 2012

In Poems

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I don’t know how to say it
to make you understand
the way my heart is yearning
to have you close at hand.
The common way’s not good enough,
“I miss you” is too pale;
beside the truth of what I feel
it’s far too stark and stale.
I miss you like the earth would miss
the sun if it should die.
I miss you like a bird without
its wings would miss the sky.
I miss you like the trees would mess
a spring that never came.
For everything needs something else
and my heart is the same.
You see, my love, I have no words
for what I need to say.
My whole world rests on you alone,
through endless, countless days.
Without your smile, your laugh, your joy
my heart grows ever weak.
It’s laden with a love-bound ache
and words I’ll never speak.
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AntonioRivera
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AntonioRivera wrote a review Review · Dec 20, 2012

Seriously, this is outstanding. It is so simple, yet so powerful. I am glad that I came upon this, really. The rhyming brought me chills; I was able to sort of sing this, that's how on point your rhyme scheme was. Continue to write, because this poem has so much meaning to it. Great job!

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misstoria
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misstoria wrote a review Review · Dec 20, 2012

This is amazing. It has so much feeling, honesty and a great deal of truth. Your piece has great flow, structure, and rhythm. When it comes to grammar and punctuation you did a great job my only complaint is what I believe is a spelling mistake, "I miss you like the trees would mess." I believe that you meant for mess to be miss. Otherwise this is a great poem.



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