Hello there! racket here to review this interesting little piece of poetry!
Well. XD This is interesting!
Okay, well, I have about three suggestions for you. Well, the first is just a question about the content? I hope you aren't actually jelly... I assume you aren't, but we can never be sure with modern science... XD I think this just describes your habits, yes? XD Sounds fun...
Okay, actual suggestion! Punctuation! Your poem doesn't really have any flow to it, it's really choppy, as you end each line with a period. Maybe try out some commas? Attempt at using something to describe your hard-core jelly-ness in between each statement? Maybe? I don't really know; I'm just brainstorming for your benefit. This is a little strange to review, but whatever.
I also did not get the 'Jelly Bond' part. I assume it's a reference to something that I am just not getting. Something to do with James Bond? A brand of jelly?
XD Sorry for my ignorance! That's all I could really see to review here, so, I guess, good job! Interestingly humorous poetry is not common on YWS, so thanks for that! Welcome to YWS, by the way. I can't wait to read more of your works in the future!
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