Angel's fall

Hello there!! I’m here to give you a short-and-sweet review on this short-and-sweet story <3
First of all, I commend you for how powerful this piece is!! It’s a tough topic, but you’ve used imagery and metaphor to create a strong piece with so much pain throughout. It’s almost palpable.
There are a few errors, but these are just nitpicks--

That may be what awaited her, though she could not bring herself to care.

This was not much different, thought Ane as she turned around.

pavement, which was now the colour of the roof tiles she had stood on just moments ago

I also feel like we could have connected with Ane’s motivations a bit more--right now, we only see her pain, never feel it along with her. Perhaps a thought or a description of her circumstances would add to the content of the story!
I ADORE how you’ve used the connection to Ane and Ada’s past--it adds a new layer to Ane’s pain, the consolation of her memory. It’s just beautiful!!
Overall, I enjoyed reading this <3 Keep writing!
<3, chem

Heya Dottie!
It might not be November yet, but that doesn't mean that NovemberCrow can't fly by and leave a review for your short story?

I noticed you're one of newer members of YWS, so I just wanted to welcome you here before I start with review itself! I hope you'll enjoy your time here and that you'll find a bunch of great writer friends same way as I did! But let's get down to business (to defeat the Huns!) now!

In her white nightgown, with the sun tangled in her hair, Ane looked like an angel. In fact you could have thought, watching her from the ground, that she might fly.

Your story is relatively short even for its genre, but you capture the reader's attention right from the start! I personally really liked the strong imagination connected to this sentence - you don't give us the most detailed and lengthy details, but I still have the plot in front of my eyes. This runs through the whole story and I'm a big fan of it! And the part about the flight fits me very well as a kind of... reverse foreshadowing of how Ane ends up at the end of the story.

Ane thought of them as flames, wrapping around her ankles, moving up to her knees, setting her nightgown on fire and then her pretty golden locks.

First of all, I can't help but say right at the beginning how cleverly you weaved a physical description of Ane's appearance into that sentence. But the way Ane thinks about the roof tiles gives away a lot about what's actually going on. Is it just the roof, or the whole building? What is the place where she feels like she's slowly being consumed by flames? We as readers don't get the answers within the story, but that doesn't mean that when you think about it more deeply, you see more than what's written on the page.
My interpretation is that it's the roof of a place that fills her with that detachment that you describe at the end of that paragraph. That it's a place she'd rather not be. That it's a place she'd rather not be. That it's a place she'd fly away from if she could. And maybe, that she saw suic!de she committed at the end of story as a very, very, twisted way of escape.

When Ane was little, she and Ada would play trust fall. One of them would spread their hands and let herself fall back, into the arms of the other.

I like that you don't introduce Ada to us. This story is strongly tied to its main character, so why would Ane have to introduce her own sister to herself? She knows who Ada is and therefore assumes that the reader either knows it too or can piece it together from the following context.
This whole paragraph seemed like a bit of a strange jump into the past when I first read it, but after finishing the story I completely understood why it was important to have it there. In order to understand how Ana's story ends, we need to know what came before it. Well, we don't. But the story works much better because of it.

She imagined that her sister was behind her, holding out her arms, ready to catch her. Ada would blame herself for not being here.

I think it’s only in these two sentences that the reader really realizes what Ane is about to do. There are clear hints in the first paragraph and the title of how the story will end, but here it is clear. The way Ane finds comfort in the idea that beyond the edge of the roof (and also certain death) is her sister, ready to catch her, only adds to the tragedy of the story. The story doesn’t explore their relationship further, but from this I gather that Ada was extremely important to Ane.

If one was to look more carefully, it resembled a halo.

This sentence makes a beautiful connection to how the whole story began - one of the first things we learn is that Anne on the roof resembles an angel. And the last thing we learn is that this resemblance doesn't really fade away even after her death. She started off as an almost an angel, almost angelic and bit of of reach. She ended dead by her own hand, almost tragic, almost real, resemblance of angel way harder to catch.

Overall, I have more or less no criticism here. Maybe you could add a little more detail about the characters or add more information about Ane's attitude to the whole thing. Because if you read it now, you feel a distance from Ane. We don't know who she is, we don't know what drove her to suicide, we don't know anything about her. The ending doesn't touch us because we don't see her inner world. But that's more like what I personally would see in the story, so it's up to you - the story is pretty good as it is written now!

Well, that's all from my side! You work interestingly with symbolism and metaphors in your work, so it would undoubtedly be interesting to see your writing style on a larger scale, but let's not jump into the possible future!

Have a nice rest of day/night/whatever is in your timezone and stay safe!
- Kay, your local (friendly?) cryptid crow