Hello there, DivergentDemigod!
This is Moonwatcher here with a review! ^-^
This is a very short and sweet poem, and I couldn't really find much wrong with it because of this. There's emotion present in this, however, it's not a very strong one. Short pieces like this make it very hard for emotion to pass through because most of the time, there isn't very much detail. If you're still going for short and sweet, I wouldn't change this. But if it was meant to be an emotional piece, I'd try to add some more vivid imagery and detail, or other poetic elements.
The city lights glimmer,
looking like stars.
Twinkling.
The comparison with an object like lights, eyes, fire, etc. with stars is constantly used, not very original, and cliche. I suggest trying to use a more creative, original analogy, that way you could present something new to the table.
From a distance
Everything looks so pretty.
This is the main part of the poem, or where you got your title from. I'm not sure if I've ever seen this analogy or not since I can't recall seeing it in a specific poem, but I feel as if it may have already been used before and not very original. "Pretty" is a weak adjective, and I feel that you could use something stronger in a poem.
The ending wraps everything up pretty well, so props to you for doing that. That's all I have to say about this poem. I hope my review helps you out! ^-^
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