Hey wazza, I see that you already have a ton of reviewers, and I can see why! This is an amazing poem, with such expressions toward the lost thoughts, and all the things that you hide in your mind, in fear of all the negativity that could come of it. Wow, might i just say, this is extremely relatable, I am your average silent child, I do not say something unless I have 100% confidence in what I am saying.(not too often.) So I totally get where you are coming from. Anywayz, less about me and more the poem itself. Ok. So all in all, it was crafted rather nicely, a lyrical sort of poem. Lyrical is probably one of the best ways to go, especially for this type of poem. However, I couldnt help but notice that most of what was said was made up of rhetorical questions, again, not a bad method, however. There is a limit to everything when it comes to construct a poem of effortless flow whilst still maintaining the message you are trying to get across. I felt that it was possible to add some metaphors, along with possibly descriptions of the feelings provided. Ok, thats all my reccomendations. All in all, a very nice poem, i loved it, and hope to see more in the future :3
Points: 54
Reviews: 34
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