Hai :3
You really dive into such raw, intense emotions here, and the way you balance between anger and understanding is so captivating!! The structure mirrors the internal conflict and I feel that struggle between wanting to distance yourself from the pain your dad caused while also recognizing the cycle he was trapped in. It’s like you’re walking this tightrope between condemnation and empathy. It makes the poem hit so hard!! It's heartbreaking for me!! I feel like I'm in your shoes.
It’s like a punch in the gut!! Especially when you change the angle to him being a victim ~~ Suddenly it’s not so black-and-white, and that complexity adds a whole new layer to your message. It’s not just anger; it’s this understanding that trauma breeds trauma and that’s a heavy realization. It's a lot to take in.
I don't forgive my dad for what he did,
but I do understand the pain he went through,
because he did the same thing to me.
This is such an amazing ending !!
That line packs so much emotion ~~ It’s like a quiet but devastating resolution. You’re not forgiving him, but you’re seeing the bigger picture. It leaves me with so many thoughts abt the generational cycles of abuse and the weight of what we inherit from our parents. It makes me really dig into my own family and relationships, which is something powerful to evoke with words!! It's devastating and brilliant.
If I had one small suggestion, it would be maybe to play around with breaking up the lines a bit more, like giving certain phrases their own space to breathe. It might intensify some of those hard-hitting moments even more!! ^_^
- Payton
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