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This really is a well written poem. It really shows that you care about your friend and vice versa.

Hello,
Welcome to YWS! I'm happy to be your reviewer for today With what the person before me said I thought this poem was very well written and enjoyable.

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-Tiffany

So I'll just get right to it.

An Autumn afternoon,
I sat on the porch alone-
When I suddenly saw you walk round the corner,

My heart leapt with joy,
I went in your pursuit,
But you had gone...
Leaving me alone;
But then I heard your laugh behind me-
So sweet and pure
I could not resist its lure.

I ran in search of you,
But you had disappeared into the blue-
Loneliness engulfed me, my heart filled with despair
For I had searched for you everywhere,
But you had left me and gone away,
To the myriad land of dreams, the place where land meets day

Abruptly, a rustle broke my reverie, the sound of shoes on the autumn leaves
And my heart filled with hope
I hastened towards the noise, I was sure I would see you,
And finally, there you were standing in the shade of a tree-
Your arms outstretched

I ran blindly towards you,
But suddenly I tripped, I fell,
And when I stood up, you were gone...
My eyes filled with tears,
The shadows of loneliness claimed my soul

When suddenly I felt a hand on my shoulder-
I turned, and saw your radiant face, shining through the gloom,
I smiled, for I realised
That you had always been by my side-
A true friend...