Published July 20, 2005
You find the defects in others
But can’t see the ones in yourself
You try to make others think like you
And only seem to make them angry
You should just appreciate
Instead you player hate
But don’t you dare accuse
Because the only one pointing is you
Sorry guys I couldn't find anything that fit besides "player hate" Maybe you could help me?
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True. A lot of my friends are like this. (Whew, I'm not the Elizabeth....) Nice going but...
You should just appreciate
Instead you player hate
Somehow.. I don't think you... wrote that right... just a feeling...
There are people like this; yes, that is true. As for the actual poem I have some suggestions. It is such a short poem, I do not recommend repeating words. The first two lines both have the word defect. Perhaps the second line can say, "But can't see them in yourself." "Player hate" is slang, it becomes dated quickly if it does not become incorporated into the evolving language. I do not know if "player hate" will stand the test of time. The last line is too long compared to the rest of the poem. I would take out "when the day is done" because that is a common expression that is done. It would also shorten the line and make it fit better.
Overall, you do write about something that is true and is very relatable.
I liked this one, because it was all true, I have a friend who is like that, her name is Elizabeth, she is always citisizing others besides herself.
But besides that, Nice one