Fade Away

I really liked it! It flowed and made since! Nothing to change

This song sounds quite good as far as message is concerned, my question is, What style of music are you planning on this being? I do love it, it has a good rhyming pattern, it flows smoothly between verses. I suggest, unless there will be a lot of instrumental parts in the spaces or at the beginning and end, that you make it a little longer, maybe expand on the story you're trying to convey. It is very good, keep writing.

Thanks so much !! I will post more stuff soon .

I like it!

Thats a really good lyrical poem the song flowed easly togather. Awesome job!!

I lay in the dark
Of a life unimaginable
But yet I am living it
I may not know the future


But yet I have you here
You have stuck by my side
Never ran and hide
For the pain and fear I shared


Chorus
When I talk to you
Life becomes okay to me ----> these first two lines were awesome!
You seem to make the pain
Fade away (x2)
Like a distant memory


It doesn't exist with you around
How do you do it to me?
It just seems so simple for you
Stay around for as long as you can


You make me smile on command
Without even a sound
I know your heart
Even with the space between us


Our love is strong and kind
For you say
No need to worry
For my arms are here
Everything will be okay, my dear ---> the last two sentence was my favorite!!!

(Chorus)

I am luckier than I know
To have someone that cares
For I will keep you close
And forever in my heart.

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*smiles*
i love it so much!!! youre composition was neat!