I was alone you save me you make me feel that you love me
Every time i hear that you don't care i just close my ears and walk away
But now every thing is clear and i'm here to say
That's enough i just laugh but that's really hurts me
Stop lying i was blind but now i can see the truth
You looked at me i looked at you but we were not the same
I looked at you c'us i love you but you to spent your free time
For me it's shame i must forget even your name
That's enough i just laugh but that's really hurts me
Stop lying i was blind but now i can see the truth
If you don't love me just come and tell me
it's bad feel when you
Think that your dream is real
When you see that the star is too near but suddenly is too far
That's enough i just laugh but that's really hurts me
Stop lying i was blind but now i can see the truth
With this smile on your face you found place
In my heart
Finally i can see this side of you don't try to hide
C'us for me your love is deid
That's enough i just laugh but that's really hurts me
Stop lying i was blind but now i can see the truth
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YES, BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO!! Your song has a chorus, and I literally just read 5 songs that didn't have a chorus, so thank you.
That's enough i just laugh but that's really hurts me
Stop lying i was blind but now i can see the truth
The chorus is so cynical, which is amazing. the word laugh makes it sound tough and crazy. So Very good word choice.
Alright it has good flow, I could see/ feel the rhythm. Very Good. I would love to hear the melody, that would very interesting. I feel that you encompassed the feeling of being lied to. From what I understood each piece of pain was represented and well written. I really enjoyed reading this. Good job, and keep writing.
I like this song it sets a tune, I just wish it was more specific like verse and chorus. I can't wait to see what the melody like, I think a lot people can relate to this song. If your going to use this as song it might be a little bit too long, but not saying it's good. I think it's really detail about the feelings. Like I said I think a lot of people can relate to this song we all been lied to about something.
hello diamond
so , this is a very good piece , full of emotions and so catchy .
i liked how you started this song , very expressive .
first i wanna say that you need to punctuate your song , also you need to make separated parts , chorus and verses .
C'us , it should be cause or because , don't use text talk in songs .
deid , it should be died .
in general , REALY REALY enjoyed reading this song , KEEEEP IT UP
see ya around
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