Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
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I was crouching down into the cool sheets, still in my boxers and white T-shirt. The breeze from the porch blew in the room as I stared at the moonlight reflecting from outside to the floor.
It was the dead of night, literally the dead of night for I felt lifeless in my bed, and also the lack of stars. The moon was only a waxing crescent. I pulled my cigarette to my mouth a took a small huff; I’ve been doing this the past two weeks, for I suffered nightmares keeping me awake, gasping as if for life, as I awoken from my bed like a zombie from it’s grave.
Hmm, well this seems like we've got someone who's having a bit of a tough time of it or at the very least someone whose had a verry tough day just trying to get up in the morning. I think you do a lovely job of really capturing that emotion here. It definitely manages to be powerful enough that as readers we immediately just have to wonder what could have happened to cause this situation and what it means for this person.
Clowns. Those dreaded creatures. They didn’t have to pull any chainsaw or knife out to frighten me, for their beady eyes and over sized shoes have done enough. Thinking over the nightmare, I took another huff of my cigarette and pushed the butt down to ashes on my nightstand.
I didn’t see what was so funny of these things. That was it, I was never going to have children. If I ever had to call up those monsters for a birthday party, I’d spend my time planning the party in a bat cave instead of that.
Still sitting in my bed, I stared across my bedroom at my mahogany wardrobe. This fear had started in such a distant memory, around only the age of six. It was a Halloween party, hosted by a young woman fashioning a tall hat and wart on the bridge of her nose. Welcoming us in, things only got more fuzzy into my thought process. All that was remembered was walking over to the counter tops of the kitchen. Were those counter tops blue or black? Marble or wood? More importantly, why did it matter?
Okayy well this is definitely an interesting twist here. Fear of clowns is a thing that exists although somehow the version that you seems to be attempting to depict here appears to be a little bit different to the one that's more commonly known. At any rate, its making this piece quite interesting here.
I closed my eyes and saw the hideous thing in the corner of the room, a giant compared to the small fragile me in the past. It smiled, teeth like spears and makeup like no other. Those inflated like white gloves reaching toward me then…
I clung my nails to my bed sheets my eyes still glued shut. It had to leave my mind slowly, I tried dissolving those memories once again, just once more. I then laid back across my bed, trying to snuggle my head against the pillow, my heavy burning eyelids taking time to relax.
Maybe this time I would finally fall back into sleep.
Well that was quite the ending there. I think you really tapped into the full on horror aspect of this a lot more powerfully than I expected and I love that. It really captures what put this person in a place to be in this state which just works wonderfully in terms of showcasing just what's at stake there. I think you've done a wonderful job of showing this moment here and capturing this horror. I do find myself wanting to know more about this character.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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