Wesh, I'm just going to give this my overall thoughts!
I like the meaning of this poem, but I feel you could've worded it better. I think the flow is perfect and it helps with the overall message. I would say work on your punctuation and I saw one or two spelling mistakes. I would add stanzas.
That's all! I hope I helped.
_XJade
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