Fireflies

Hiya! oooooh...lookie lookie guys its my first review...

It’s stings at the insides of my nose < I almost think at is superfluous here.
Coarse, stagnant scent
Desert(ion) of red < oooh nice use of stylism, I like
A place in half-empty overturned glass < I think there should be an a in front of 'half-empty' or it should read A place in half-empty overturned glasses
My world is crimsom tinted
Alight and on fire
A Butter
F . l . y < is the y supposed to be lowercase?
wing-s-tipped with gasoline
Alight upon a cancerstick < I love this last two lines great imagery

‘‘I may have cried.’’ What of it ? < I like the spacing here, although you need a space after the ".

And your nicotine hashed laughter. < don't think you really need and here or a period/full stop.
Followed me home and flittered against my door
Like the butterFLY. < I liked how you capitalized FLY. Nice.
Although, your laughter didn’t scream while it did it < this is not very clear, I suggest revising this statement, maybe to - your laughter didn't scream but it did something like that.

It’s not at all like the storybooks say < I think this could be refrased to - it's not like the storybooks...
Where you ravish me in almost-private (secret) places < I think the words would have more impact if (secret) was attached to places or private
Marking me as yours < as seems superfluous
Bruised skin near my throat
It’s rather winded-breathless < not sure about this, maybe, winding-breathless
All time < hmm...I don't really like this, maybe you should scratch this line.
All dark
All night
When you’d never dream of doing anything but tasting me < when again, seeming superfluous
And I’m enthralled by a smokey-mint tongue [color=blue]< oooh nice....I can taste it
That can trace my spine and leave it dry
So light is touch. <<< ....shiversss....

Then there are the fireflies < then, deleted it, makes the sentance a bit wordy
So bright
Like stars
You can almost believe that we really are < almost also superfluous
Floating, light and spinning
Although, do stars dance like fireflies (I wonder) ? < I suggested something like this for a rephrase, you can even take the and out -

Floating, spinning (and) light

do stars dance like fireflies (I wonder?)

< something like that

And then you’re off again < again also superfluous
And can’t stop smiling.
I was not (a secret summer fling) !
The love of your life, maybe.
But If I told you that, you’d laugh/ed/. < don't like the previous three lines...hmmm...they seem kind of soft, a let down it a poem of this strenght, but I do like how you wrote laugh/ed/. that was cool.

I can hear it still, it’s nicotine hashed, and smokey mint flavoured.
Dancing in my ears like fireflies (is that how it feels to have a light inside ?)
There’s dust on the road still
And an echo of your fingers
On the skin of my palm

< my suggestions on formatting on the last stanza

I can hear it still,
it’s nicotine hashed-
smokey mint flavoured.
Dancing in my ears like fireflies
(is that how it feels to have a light inside ?)

There’s dust on the road
And an echo of fingers
On the skin of my palm

I really, really like the idea of Fireflies and the mosaic of light throughout the poem. Nice job. There a few, well a little more than a few, nit-picky things I've highlighted for you that I think you should look at. I really like the ending, superb flow to it.

I hope this helps.

Bett