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Hi there!
Alright first off, this was just so amazing! I don't think I've ever read anything like this before, and I wasn't expecting this kind of story when I clicked on the link to review. I love the quote at the beginning and the bible verse at the end. I was so into this that I forgot that I was on YWS xD The way it's written, it could be a published book. I don't normally read things like this, I'm just not very religious, but if the bible was written like this, I'd have read it time and time again.
If you have anything else like this, please let me know. I'd be more than happy to read it a review it. I didn't see any mistakes in this, but I was into this I don't think I would have been able to see any unless it was a spelling problem and I couldn't read the word haha.
You're really good, and I will be reading more of your works, just to let you know. I agree with Stori, it was smart to use the Hebrew names rather than today's modern versions. It makes the story that much better.
Until next time, keep up the good work and keep writing things like this!

And stay insane, all of the best writers are c:

--ForsakenAngel

O.O That was... awesome. I'd really like to review this, but I'm honestly a little bit speechless. Not many pieces ever make me physically react, but my jaw literally dropped at this. Thanks for sharing this one!

Wow. Your writing held me in suspense all the way through. There was only one error that I noticed-

As soft a lilies,