I would say that he complains about deadlines and reports but he's never able to call much less complain. All those silly romantic texts are sent in total vain. I bet his inbox is so full he doesn't even read them so don't waste your time. There's a microscopic line between being busy and living at work. Honey if you have no time to dine, two hours of sleep a day, and a million missed calls from your poor girlfriend, you're a helpless workaholic.
The only time you can breathe in peace is when you're in those mirrored elevators, before you hit the rush of work. I hope you know that you're losing her faster than someone who disappears in quick sand. She's going to get sick of you being so stubborn, bored of you ignoring her, and tired of staying up waiting for you to call. Pretty soon you'll get one of those, “You’re not the man I fell in love with." texts. TEXTS! That’s all she can send you because you never pick up when she calls you on your stupid Black Berry. The worst part is the countless blunt answers and total ignoring you get. One day you'll call him hoping that he'll tell you he misses everything about you, instead he starts a lecture about sacrifice. You'll hope he's piss drunk, lying, joking but he's not. There's so many terrible things you want to say but they don't escape your mouth.
The formality of "goodnight" is said.It's over and it has been that way for a long time.
You roll your eyes and wish you could go back in time and not make this mistake. Regret washes over you and everything feels like a lie. This is what happens when you fall in love with a workaholic, this is what happened to me. Let your work keep you warm at night, give me my kisses back because I don't miss you any ways. Goodbye forever, I hope I never see you again.
Hello there, So a few little things that caught me here:
Poems contain lines and stanzas, each and every one, maybe not most concrete poems, but the others do. This poem should definitely contain stanzas, but that's A-okay, you can always work on that.
1. It's in bold...I know I am very picky, I am so sorry! haha. It kind of just messes with me...I am sorry. Anyway..to number two!
2. Poems are lovely, dandy little tulips sometimes and even more so when they are in stanzas. I LOVE stanzas! Unfortunately, this poem doesn't have any..
3.You missed a few commas, but everyone does that, just a heads up.
4. Okay, so the sixth sentence is very confusing, "The only time you can breathe in peace is when you're in those mirrored elevators, before you hit the rush of work." Some elaboration would work very well after that line, like maybe continuing on with something about the mirrors, you could possibly show some symbolism. Literary devices are always fantastic, symbolism is a very good one.
Now for some things I really enjoyed!
I LOVE how you were completely sarcastic throughout most of the poem, sarcasm adds humor and who doesn't like humor?! Also, I like how you used all caps on the word "texts." You repeated it, AND capitalized it which added emphasis to the meaning. I love emphasis!
This piece could use some work, but nonetheless, it was pretty good.
Toodles.
Hello! Review time!
Okay, this is a pretty strong piece, you managed to convey your anger and hurt very strongly. A pretty good topic. You've written it in such a way that the reader is able to grasp the anger and hurt you're feeling. good job
Now, constructive criticism:
I feel, the text could have used a bit revision. There seems to be some errors(grammatically, of course) in the whole piece.
You see, in these lines, there seems to be a problem. I think it should have been more like:
Its just a suggestion anyway
And, there also seems to be a problem with the second person reference.
At one point, 'You' referred to the guy and then suddenly 'You' started referring to the heartbroken girl. That's the problem in the second and third paragraphs.
Hmm, thats all the errors I found
This is a pretty good piece. You've done a good job, like I said to portray the emotions pretty well.
Keep up the good job!
Oh, and Welcome to YWS!! Sorry for the late wish
Thanks so much
I wrote this poem in a freakishly livid state of mind so yeah I figured it'd have errors. Thanks so much for the critique 
xxxx
Strong and explosive.
Happens to everyone but the way you have said it got more power.
One can understand your anger but it is very vague.
If you would have put more strong words, the bullet would have gone right through his temple.
I liked it. keep posting your good work.
Thanks so much
) xx, Claire