Published September 23, 2008
"Public as a Frog"
it is to my regret that
there's an adolescent
who isn't fluffy
yet nonetheless is as sterile as a raccoon
what a shame that the
poor lad
with all the airs and meanness
of a cat
has none of the wisdom or tasteful content
the
poor boy!
he doesn't have a sticky tongue, good for catching insects
nor can he hippoty-hop
no imperial charms to speak of
yet he is just as public as any frog
Somehow my sympathy doesn't extend far enough-
I still don't want to kiss him
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great i liked it.It was fantastic great!.But it was a bit catchy And i think adding capitals would be nice but if you think it's not necessary go ahead you don't need them.But there was 1 or 2 mistakes so here goes.
The poor boy!
he doesn't have a sticky tongue,
good for catching insects.
and i hope you will wright poems just like this
good luck!!
Lol! I love the tone! It's light, sarcastic, and amusing! I love how you compare that poor boy to different animals.
The only advice I have for you is to maybe consider some more punctuation. I think it would make it easier to read. Plus, the word hippoty-hop (hippety-hop?) was a bit much for me.
I hope to see more poems like this in the future. Too often we get lovey-dovey or really depressing poems. Thanks for lightening my day!
It makes me curious to meet this boy who is as "sterile as a raccoon." Lol!
--Anna