Hey Mars
Thanks for reviewing my poem. I'd almost given up on anyone doing so!
I get what you said about the full stops, I think I was trying to do it to illustrate her separate thoughts but I probably did go a bit overboard.
I think you may have mis-read the last line... It does say "her men" which was deliberately done, but I see what you mean about if I had put "man", hence why I kept it plural lol.
Please somebody else review too!
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