Published December 13, 2010
For everything there must be a last..
A last minute,a last hour,a last day,month or year.
A last drink,a last coke, a last tequila,scotch or beer.
A last love,a last kiss, a last heart, hug or rage
Or even last words written on a page.
..But yet the worst last thing is your last breath..
Because what will follow will surely be your last test...
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Hello there
Oh, and welcome to YWS!
If I take this poem lightly, then it's...quirky. I liked the use of "last" to relate to your intention. If I take an in depth consideration and stuff, I really don't like it. To me, it does not sound like a poem. It sounds more to me like an oral speech. It's too simple. It's no utterly bad, but it's not good either.
Keep writing
I really liked this. It can relate to a lot of people, which can be hard to accomplish.
The last line was by far my favorite.
The only nitpick I have is the spacing. It was a little difficult to read, and takes the reader's attention away from the poem itself. Other than that, I liked it.
-UCntCMee
I edited it with spacing and punctuation how I would put it. I really liked it. It's sad, yet cute at the same time. It's the kind of poem that makes you remember eating the last piece of pizza, or the last day of summer. I like how it rhymes.