Published December 17, 2010
Dear diary
I have just this moment got up to my dorm room and guess what?! My worst nightmare has just started. Professor McGonagall said she would sort us into house teams using this old grubby hat that talked! Imagine that! Anyway my name was first on the list i went up feeling very nervous as i didn't know what would happen, i sat down on the stool provided and the hat was placed gently on my head. Then this booming voice called out saying 'Gryffindor' and one table all road up in cheers, so i took the hat off and sat down at that table, Severus then went up and the hat called out 'Sliverin' and he looked down when he went to sit on the opposite table that was cheering. I turned around to look at him and he smiled an unsteady smile. Next up was James Potter and his friend Sirius both of them ended up on my table, Sirius tried to be nice by telling me to sit next to him and James but i don't forgive that easy! I mean just because we're in the same house team doesn't mean I’d magical forgive them does it?
Love Lilly Evans
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