Published December 3, 2005
Fly like an eagle,swim like a fish
Take me on your journey,
so I can leave this rubbish
Take me to the rainbows, take me to the butterflies
Take me to the place where I can see his eyes
Take me to the waterfalls.
Take me to the place,
where happiness calls
Take me with you,
I can't stay here now...
All I've got left is a painful sin and a broken vow
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Thank you guys..I really worked on this poem before i posted it so I guess my Hard worked is paid
I like it. It's pretty and short and has good rhythm.
short and very sweet.
does your name mean somethiing related to the moon (as in a Hindi word??)
i'm really curious.
Thnx
It reminded me of that song that's like FLY LIKE AN EAGLE SO MY SPIRIT CAN BE FREE
I liked it... nice flow... although I wouldn't capitalize Take before that butterflies thing, after the comma.
Painful (usually words ending with -ful aren't double L'ed.
It sounded like a sad lullaby. I liked it.
-Elizabeth
thnx..I don't think its one of my best ones tough
interesting.