Young Writers Society

Hello, I'll be reviewing your poem today.

I am a firstborn child as well, and I have always had a love-hate relationship with it. Sometimes I am glad I get to experience everything first, but my parents are always so much more easygoing on my brother and sister.

In the beginning of the poem, you were making it seem like you did not like being the firstborn child. At the end, however, you seemed to be contempt with it. My question for you is what is the message you were trying to convey in this work?

This poem was very entertaining to read. However, I did find some instances where more colorful words could have been chosen. Also, the repetition of the phrase "being firstborn" gets tiresome. I agree with the comments that say the phrase could have been swapped out.

You are a talented poet. I encourage you to keep going at it.

Hello there, I'm BlueSunset. I'll be reviewing your work for today.

Firstly, I would like to point out the effort and product of rhyme in this piece. I don't usually read many rhyming poems lately, but this seems to have a good pattern going along with it.

A main issue for me was the excessive use in "Being firstborn." I feel like you could trade off that line every other stanza or something? It becomes a little overwhelming, and could be used less in a way that is noticeable but not too much. With it being used so much, this line seemed a little out of place. I don't know if it's just me, but it also seems like it blocks the amount of flow that could be running through this poem. Having good flow in a poem is important, you don't want to decrease the amount of it.

But being firstborn is an envied spot,

Hello! Its Mikey for a review,

First, i like the creativity of the poem being that it has been well defined into stanzas depending on the change in idea. I think it could be wise and encouraging when you could have first pointed out the positive sides of being a firstborn and then later talk about the negatives. This will first impress appreciation then later later express the complain over it: Meaning, i could prefer the third and the fourth stanzas to appear before the first and the second.
Second, the use of the word ' being firstborn' looks vague because it is too monotonous and the poem looks much of just the word 'being firstborn'.